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This is the prologue of my story.

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Wormhole

Book One: The Peak of Malindrok

by Joe Carson

prologue

Queen Anatasma has given birth to a son!  those were the words echoed throughout the city walls of Wondirgo, the capital of Sarakan.  An heir to the throne of Sarakan had been born.  All went well for the next few days until Baratum, the former king of Sarakan, was mysteriously murdered.  No soul in the castle walls suspected anyone or anything until a thief from the clan of Molago-Ra was caught snooping around the kingdom.  He was taken to questioning.  Many secrets were revealed.  The questioners found out that the Molago-Ra clan had sent a member to kill the king.  The thief also revealed that Molago-Ra and his clan were plotting to terminate the prince and queen of Sarakan.  Not too long after, the guards and the questioners began to get very worried.

All the watchmen and guards had been put on double watch.  Not even the questioners knew exactly what was going to happen, but they knew if the Molago-Ra clan’s plot succeeded, things in the kingdom would turn out quite horrible.  One day, one of the tower watchmen nearly fell off his post with alarm.  He shouted out, “There’s an army!  A huge one!  I can see!  Their wagons are stocked with the deadliest of weapons!” The chief guard, Halomad, realized completely who the army belonged to.  Molago-Ra.

Of all the enemies the castle of Wondirgo had repelled, these ones were unbelievably strong.  The first few hours of war, everything was going well (which in terms of war, however, means they’ve only lost a few thousand men and their castle was still standing) until Halomad looked hard to the horizon.  At first it was a blur, then a small bulge, and finally Halomad could see what it was.  Dragon-pulled siege towers with around 200 trolls marching behind them.  Once the soldiers could understand what was coming towards them, Halomad could see soldier after soldier, even his own brother, Motorok, drop their weapons in disbelief.  Halomad knew this was the end.  “Retreat!”  Clamored the chief guard as loud as he could.  

With failing hope, Queen Anatasma summoned all her magicians to create a portal to any world where the prince would be safe.  The magicians used almost all their power creating the portal.  The strain was enough to make them pass out, (and it did.) “Magicians, will you be able to bring my son back?”  “No, my queen.  We don’t know where we are sending him. we are just trying to find a peaceful land.  Besides, the only magicians trained in this kind of magic will most likely be dead by the day’s end.”  The queen took this news hard.  As she was weeping,  the last standing magician said, “Be brave, queen.  Believe in the prophecy!”  

The queen kissed her son on the forehead and slowly pushed the child’s cradle into the portal.  “With the highest hope that you will return to me, young prince Antarod!” Just as her words were finished, the portal closed and the door burst into flames.  The door was kicked down when none other than Molago-Ra himself stepped through the door frame.  Goblins snaked across the ceiling and walls surrounding and attacking the magicians.  Queen Anatasma was standing alone in the center of a room surrounded by goblins and an evil warlord.  Then the first of all suspected things happened.  Two goblins dropped from the ceiling and bound her wrists.  Then, as the kingdom around her burned, Queen Anatasma was led toward some unknown prison cell in the heart of Ba-Tagorom.